Post Nine: Creating a script

 SCRIPTS:

Our second workshop with Becky Knapp involved the process of assessing each other scripts; we all had to reach all of the scripts written and say how the could be improved, what we liked and what didn't work so well. Becky herself had also read all of our scripts and gave us the appropriate feedback.The assessments of our first drafts enabled the creation of the second draft to be produced to a better quality and a lot easier.





The first version of my script:

The feedback I received about my script was constructive as a whole with an appropriate amount of positives and negatives; as I received the feedback I made notes on what I needed to improve and how to get it done. The opinions were generally positive as Becky and the rest of the class agreed that my script was 'visually strong', which meant I had a strong basis to create a short film with. They also highlighted the two key problems with my script, the first was the format and structure; the amendments involved a simple case of changing the alignments on word and changing the font and font size. The second problem that there was nowhere near enough detail in my script, the character actions were far too vague and there was a lack of dialogue too which in turn meant that the relationship between 'the girl' and 'her father' was not fully established.

During Becky's feedback she advised that I watch Lynne Ramsay's 'Gasman' as like my script it was based on 'showing rather than telling' and was visually strong. Gasman is based in the Christmas season spirirt, 'Lynne' a young girl dresses up with the aid of her mother. 'Lynne' and her brother then leave to the pub with their father, along the way they meet with a woman who was has two children with her, of a similar age. 'Lynne notices that the girl acts all too familiar with her dad'.

                                             

After going into alot more depth in the detailing of my script and adding more dialogue where I found appropriate and where generally needed I created a second draft of my script.

***IMAGE OF HOW I THEN DEVELOPED MY SCRIPT***



Mrs Shipp said... Did your audience (class) understand your message was it clear? can you relate this back to the exam topic of audience reception theory and preferred readings, negotiated readings etc.

When showed the first draft of my script for my short film 'Bruises' the class understood the message I was trying to convey - According to the audience reception theory my class would have understood the meaning due to the fact that we all have a relatively similar cultural background, therefore we all interpret texts in similar ways. Within the terms preferred and negotiated readings media studies implies that no text is simply 'neutral' - therefore each media text contains a range of meanings/messages that have been encoded into the text either deliberately or unconsciously. This leads to the fact that the interpretation my audience had on my media product was intended by the maker (myself) therefore it is a preferred reading.